I was a cookie on
the Pick En Save shelve. Stacked in a box with all my other friends. I loved to
see people pass by because that meant that I had more days to come. But on Christmas day all the cookies where
gone except me there was one last visitor looking at me. They could see me but
couldn’t reach me. Until the worker came and got me all the way in the back.
The kids all wanted me to eat on Christmas morning. They left me on a plate
with a couple other so that they could eat me next morning. When they went to
bed I saw a cup of milk and wondered why he was there. The next minute a guy
walked in and saw that Santa was here to save the day. He ate all of the other
cookies except me. He was hungry of all the other cookies he and the million he
has to still eat. When he left I wondered on what the kids would feel like with
all of the cookies gone but then I remembered its Christmas and your supposed
to leave cookies out. As he left me I rolled off the plate and walked down the
street to see some friends at the grocery store. When he hoped back into a box
he know he had a day to live. And that’s the end of the store.
WORK ON GRAMMAR! it is a little hard to follow and you changed perspective on the last sentence. Overall, nice job.
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome! I like how you said that you were from Pick n save.
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